what do you think of this for my opening of my zombie story?
Question: Robert Jensen was out in his shed in his back garden. The Jensen housie backed out into a wood, and the back garden was just an extension of that; trees and a grassy clearing served as their garden. His blonde hair was plastered to his head as he worked on his newest cupboard.
Answer: Just one thing, the hook, the first sentence. Start in the middle of the action. Start at the part where his wife comes to him, that one quote, or at the TV quote. But "Robert Jensen was out in his shed in his back garden." does not hook your reader.







